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Tolvo's Pieces

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Tolvo's Pieces

Post by Tolvo » Sun Jun 17, 2018 2:56 am

Hello there I'm Tolvo, I love to write! I used to write a lot of articles for now defunct sites and enjoy doing criticism and analysis. So I figured from time to time I'd link things I've written to get some feedback on the quality of the writing. While I think I'm okay at telling stories and explaining and conveying ideas, I really struggle with technical writing skills. So any feedback would be more than appreciated. Note, I do write a lot about politics but I'm not looking to have political debates.

So my most recent piece was on Military Fetishism and Violence in Rainbow Six Siege. Let me know what you think of it. ^_^

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Re: Tolvo's Pieces

Post by Dazargeros » Fri Dec 14, 2018 5:05 am

Wait. Not to be an arsehole, but why do you make political commentary if you don't wanna talk/debate about it?

P.S. The article was strange... Not to say the writing was bad, but moreso I don't really see the purpose of it. Games and stories will always fetish somethin' or other, whether it be masculinity or femininity, gore or love, and there are waaaay worse games that show 10x more violence than Rainbow six, Mortal Kombat for example.
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