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Feedback- Genius of Love of Lonlieness

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Rembrandt
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Feedback- Genius of Love of Lonlieness

Post by Rembrandt » Mon Apr 30, 2018 3:50 am

Tell me about how you liked it! Or you didn't whatever. What can I improve on, and what could I expand on?
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Re: Feedback- Genius of Love of Lonlieness

Post by Moccasin » Tue May 15, 2018 1:14 pm

Hey Rem! Love your use of imagery throughout your work. Can't say I'm too familiar with it, but right off the back, I see some spelling errors that you might wanna check out. 'Lonlieness' is actually spelled loneliness. 'Casm' is spelled chasm. Just a head's up, nothing too serious.

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